I love how this little story was born of a prompt from a comment!fic and now we have this stunning, multi-layered tale being woven. Really, how fucking cool is that?
So part B was gorgeous and in some ways unexpected, for me at least. First, I loved how they are still side stepping a little. I loved the detail of Luke carrying around money and Noah letting him believe that perhaps he is leaving. The uncertainty in the beginning was nicely juxtaposed with Noah having Luke sit down near him. I dunno - that little scene with him patting the bed, motioning for him to join him against both boys figuring stuff out I really liked. And I LOVED Luke asking Noah what he wanted.
This: "Kissing is nice. I don't kiss a lot, y'know? Most people aren't willing to spend the extra money, and they really just want my mouth somewhere else anyway."
Seriously broke my heart. But it was also the unexpected part, the fact that he told Luke what he wanted. Which was me getting all smiley at him letting himself go a little.
I also loved the buffet line that has been mentioned but this was my fav, part:
Luke bites at Noah's collarbone, laves his tongue down to a piercing. He sucks the metal into his mouth, tugs sharply. He revels in the tang of metal and flesh, kisses the nipples Noah liked abused. The sharp surge of his hair being pulled acted like a match against gasoline in his blood. He slides himself up the expanse of Noah's chest, so they're skin to skin and god that feels good. He laps at Noah's lips and uses the quiet moan of his partner to slip inside. Their tongues circle around each others as Luke explores Noah's mouth. The sharpness of canines, the smoothness inside and the strong flavor of coffee. He loses himself in the sensual experience of kissing a man who should be practiced in this art, but has admitted he isn't.
And I quoted the whole thing because I adored every single damn line. The imagery was lovely and it just got to me.
And Juan never tasted anything like the sweetness Luke offered. Juan was sex and sun and desperation, even when things were slow, calmer, they were always rushed. But this? There is no rush, no need, just a slip and slide that Noah wasn't entirely sure he could trust.
Yea! for peppering in more Juan. And loved the differences that Noah feels about them.
Also I smiled at the 15 stuff and I do love how Noah let himself fall into the kiss and experience it and then pull back. But this time he lets Luke stay. I'm also in awe how you managed to pull so much into that insanely hot kiss. Just loves it all. *many many kisses to you*
P.S. Also I'm ridiculously enthralled with the fact that Luke seems to have a fetish for Noah's piercings. *grins*
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So part B was gorgeous and in some ways unexpected, for me at least. First, I loved how they are still side stepping a little. I loved the detail of Luke carrying around money and Noah letting him believe that perhaps he is leaving. The uncertainty in the beginning was nicely juxtaposed with Noah having Luke sit down near him. I dunno - that little scene with him patting the bed, motioning for him to join him against both boys figuring stuff out I really liked. And I LOVED Luke asking Noah what he wanted.
This: "Kissing is nice. I don't kiss a lot, y'know? Most people aren't willing to spend the extra money, and they really just want my mouth somewhere else anyway."
Seriously broke my heart. But it was also the unexpected part, the fact that he told Luke what he wanted. Which was me getting all smiley at him letting himself go a little.
I also loved the buffet line that has been mentioned but this was my fav, part:
Luke bites at Noah's collarbone, laves his tongue down to a piercing. He sucks the metal into his mouth, tugs sharply. He revels in the tang of metal and flesh, kisses the nipples Noah liked abused. The sharp surge of his hair being pulled acted like a match against gasoline in his blood. He slides himself up the expanse of Noah's chest, so they're skin to skin and god that feels good. He laps at Noah's lips and uses the quiet moan of his partner to slip inside. Their tongues circle around each others as Luke explores Noah's mouth. The sharpness of canines, the smoothness inside and the strong flavor of coffee. He loses himself in the sensual experience of kissing a man who should be practiced in this art, but has admitted he isn't.
And I quoted the whole thing because I adored every single damn line. The imagery was lovely and it just got to me.
And Juan never tasted anything like the sweetness Luke offered. Juan was sex and sun and desperation, even when things were slow, calmer, they were always rushed. But this? There is no rush, no need, just a slip and slide that Noah wasn't entirely sure he could trust.
Yea! for peppering in more Juan. And loved the differences that Noah feels about them.
Also I smiled at the 15 stuff and I do love how Noah let himself fall into the kiss and experience it and then pull back. But this time he lets Luke stay. I'm also in awe how you managed to pull so much into that insanely hot kiss. Just loves it all. *many many kisses to you*
P.S. Also I'm ridiculously enthralled with the fact that Luke seems to have a fetish for Noah's piercings. *grins*