Prompt: Elevator
Prompt: Tears
Word count: 300
Rating: PG-13 for language, I guess?


The library elevator shudders as it always does, but this time it hiccups to a stop between floors eighteen and nineteen. Noah squeezes his eyes shut, clamps his hands against the railing. "Tell me the elevator is about to move and we're going to be fine."

"Noah? What's wrong?" Luke edges his hand between the wall and his boyfriend's tense back. He kisses Noah's temple, all the while tattooing patterns on his back.

"Don't like small spaces," he grits out. "Haven't ever since the Colonel -" Noah swallows. Tears leak from the corners his eyes.

Luke shifts, presses his chest to Noah's, wraps their fingers together. "Shh, shh. The Colonel isn't here. You're with me." He swiped at the salty trails with the tip of his tongue. "There are lots of things you like about being trapped, Noah." He bit at Noah's earlobe. "Didn't you tell me that last night?"

"Luke." Pale color fades against the red blooming on Noah's cheeks. His blush turns Luke on.

"You remember don't you? On your stomach? Me, holding you down? Starting to ring a bell?" Luke grinds his hips closer, winds his hands up into the curls at the back of Noah's neck. "You made the hottest noises. Sexy as hell when you whisper my name, let me pin your wrists, fuck into you again and again."

Noah bites his lip and whimpers. "Nngh"

"I was all over you, had you pinned, no room for anything between the two of us, barely even space for breathing. My hand jacking you off. I don't remember you minding small spaces last night?" Luke sucks at Noah's neck, scrapes his teeth along his jaw. "So I'll just stay right here until the elevator starts moving again, okay. And you can remember how good it can be."

From: [identity profile] barbaragail.livejournal.com


Oh God...

Poignant -
"Shh, shh. The Colonel isn't here. You're with me."

Sexy -
He swiped at the salty trails with the tip of his tongue.

Hot -
"I was all over you, had you pinned, no room for anything between the two of us, barely even space for breathing. My hand jacking you off. I don't remember you minding small spaces last night?"

Pure Love -
Luke sucks at Noah's neck, scrapes his teeth along his jaw. "So I'll just stay right here until the elevator starts moving again, okay. And you can remember how good it can be."

How do you do it? How do you knock me off my feet with so few words! I adore you! You know that I adore you, right?

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


*laughs*

i think your comments are almost as long as my drabble. you're so sweet.

From: [identity profile] frances-veritas.livejournal.com


Oh God.

Noah bites his lip and whimpers. "Nngh"

Yeah. Basically. I've come to the conclusion that whenever you and Laura write anything, I forget how to use the English language. Yeah.

dfakljfhadjkafahdfa!


From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


afhladl flahfiuaerbvila beviladlvafilebfvhk


*kisses* i write these things in hopes to make you lose control of the english language.

From: [identity profile] divainpink15.livejournal.com


This was just wonderful. Everything you've written has this way of playing SO clearly in my mind, and this was DEFINITELY no exception. And you have a really wonderful way of setting up the absolute smuttiest scenes EVER. :D

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


okay, so as you mentioned that it was smutty - let me ask you. what would you have rated this?

From: [identity profile] divainpink15.livejournal.com


I agree with what you posted it under when you posted it at Luke/Noah [or was it the Hayloft? Regardless...], I think PG-13 works, with the NC-17 implications =)

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


oh good. That's why i didn't post it to the hayloft, because it wasn't precisely smutty, just implied smutty, y'know?

From: [identity profile] qafaddiction.livejournal.com


Noah claustrophobic... interesting! Makes for a sexy drabble. Luke is a sweet boyfriend. Sorry, this is lame feedback. LOL In short: you write good! :P

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


There's this line in BtVS where Xander gets all confused and says "To read makes our speaking English good." What you said reminded me of that.

From: [identity profile] shizumaslover.livejournal.com


I'm kind of beside myself right now. This plays to two of my biggest kinks: elevators and kissing/licking tears. I just... shit. This is so wonderful. I wish I could put it better than that.

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


some day, if you like elevators, i've got a story for you. Not yet, but someday.

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


there hasn't been anything happening in the elevator, it just centers around random (or not so random) meetings between the two boys. It's AU.

From: [identity profile] ladysonsie.livejournal.com


You drabbled! YOU! It's 300 words! I love it!

And I'm gonna stop with the exclamation points now I swear!

This? Is hot and sexy and sweet all wrapped in a stopped elevator. Plus points for sticking in backstory on Noah in a drabble. You win. *kisses*

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


Well, I figured that if someone may be remixing me for the remix the drabble thing, I best get myself some drabbles to be remixed. So yeah. I drabbled. It was cool. Anxiety provoking, but cool.

From: [identity profile] kissmedirty.livejournal.com


So much amazing wonderfullness in so few words!
this was really quite beautiful and sexy and i have to stop writing now .. cuz I need to read it again :D

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


glad that you liked it. i enjoyed writing it. read again :)

From: [identity profile] ithilien22.livejournal.com


You! With the drabbling! And it's so, so beautiful. What a lovely scene, and so many emotions captured all at once - the fear and the anxiety and the love and the extreme hotness! Plus, this Luke is adorable. Nice distraction tactic! ;)

I love this to infinity and I love you even more for writing it for me. I felt so terrible all day and this makes me feel 2140823407234 times better. ♥

Also? I hope you realize that now that I know you can drabble, I am going to demand it from you ALL THE TIME.

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


This luke was kinda adorable. And toppy!luke is hot!luke.


also? i hope you realize that now that i know i can drabble, i'm going to demand prompts and hand holding all the time.

From: [identity profile] luvflix.livejournal.com


God I love the way you write!!!!

"You remember don't you? On your stomach? Me, holding you down? Starting to ring a bell?" Luke grinds his hips closer, winds his hands up into the curls at the back of Noah's neck. "You made the hottest noises. Sexy as hell when you whisper my name, let me pin your wrists, fuck into you again and again."

Love the kink! Noah pinned down..mmmmmm....
xxx

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


:) thanks. this was fun. Plus, in my mind, Noah is almost always the bottom.

From: [identity profile] indigo-5.livejournal.com


Oh, this is so unfair! You write something so wonderful and then stop after 300 words! What are you trying to do to me? ;)

But really, it was fabulous. Loved how much you packed into such a short piece -- all the emotions came through so clearly, and the heat too.

"You remember don't you? On your stomach? Me, holding you down? Starting to ring a bell?" Luke grinds his hips closer, winds his hands up into the curls at the back of Noah's neck. "You made the hottest noises. Sexy as hell when you whisper my name, let me pin your wrists, fuck into you again and again."

Noah bites his lip and whimpers. "Nngh"


I'm with Noah.

Thank you for this!

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


The thing about me is that i always tell far too much back story, so this is excellent practice. I kinda like that i managed to knock it down to 300 words. It was HARD.

Thrilled you liked it :)

From: [identity profile] nouveau-monday.livejournal.com


So ... thoughtful ... and giving. He's such a giver. I like that about him.

From: [identity profile] j525.livejournal.com


You're my hero. I just love this, it just makes me all warm and mushy inside. :)
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